Will nobody think of the bears?

[glenatron]

So today I wrote a song. Usually I spend ages working on lyrics until they are absolutely perfect but this one came pretty much straight from my brain to the page, pausing only at my guitar.

That would be fine, only I am completely unable to judge whether it's quite good in a slightly naive and bless way or if it is the kind of song that Phoebe would write. Normally I've got a lot of faith in my writing abilities (as life_of_tom will verify) but I have a definite suspicion this one might just be fairly dire. I'll hide the lyric away behind a cut so that you can ignore it or give it a look if you feel so inclined and tell me whether or not I should burn it...


Polar Bears

There’s been some bad weather for polar bears
I hear that more is on the way
If you keep turning up the thermostat
Eventually someone has to pay
They’re just a little bit ahead of us
We’re not so far back in the queue
So bad weather for polar bears
Is bad weather for me and you

It’s been a good year for hurricanes
They’ve found themselves some brand new homes
When your roof has gone it’s easier
To tell which way the wind blows
It’s been a good year for forest fires
They burn with a passion and a flame
The water we’re taking to put them out
It isn’t falling back as rain

Chorus:
How’s the weather holding out for you?
Is it sunshine is it rain?
It hasn’t snowed here in England
Since I don’t remember when

It’s been a bad time for commuters
Each year the roads just seem more full
Hum along with the air conditioning
It’s getting harder to stay cool

How’s the weather holding out for you?
Is it sunshine is it rain?
It hasn’t snowed here in England
Since I don’t remember when
It’s starting to get hot in here
And I’m starting to get scared
That no-one’s making air conditioning
To help the polar bears

Comments

[life-of-tom.livejournal.com]

I see why you might have wondered about a possible 'phoebe' factor, but I think it's probably just blessm, not mawkish. Try thinking about it being sung by Billy Bragg, and I think you'll see it's ok. Perhaps the last couplet on the first verse is a little heavy-handed, but the rest does what it sets out to do.

[glenatron.livejournal.com]

Billy Bragg singing it does make it sound better. I can go with that.

I agree about the final couplet- that was kind of a last minute change because it was "no-one's doing anything to help the polar bears" which was just cheesy, then I wanted to bring in air conditioning but I don't have enough syllables free at the end of the song to say quite what I want to, or I haven't worked out how to say it concisely enough.

[shanks01.livejournal.com]

Yup, the T man knows what he's talking about.

You guy gonna be at the jackals? If so I think we should all bring our guitars and go crazy! That would rock.

Just gotta hope I can make it now!